re-written haiku
one of the nice things about this blog is i'm having a lot of haiku exchanges with people these days ...
a very sleepy friend sent me this this morning immediately before bed:
The swirling night fog
Glows brightly then fades away ...
Then the moon pours clear
there's some imagery i like here, especially the night fog and the concept of the moon pouring -- i re-wrote it:
swirling fog of night
haunts strongly then loses hold
leaving pouring moon
a very sleepy friend sent me this this morning immediately before bed:
The swirling night fog
Glows brightly then fades away ...
Then the moon pours clear
there's some imagery i like here, especially the night fog and the concept of the moon pouring -- i re-wrote it:
swirling fog of night
haunts strongly then loses hold
leaving pouring moon
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